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POND SONG

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Submitted Date 05/26/2019
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Pond song

Dripping

Dripping

Dripping down






 

Green caresses the clear surface

Splash


 

Wings of hope

 

Springs anew, in collective voices

Immortalized in crumbling stone

 

Rising

Rising

Rising higher

Heaven holds you

 

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  • David Ross Washington Jr 4 years, 10 months ago

    Pond songDrippingDrippingDripping down
    I love this, for whatever reason. I read this part like a Dr. Seuss poem.

    • Jennifer 4 years, 10 months ago

      Lol..im happy you just read it david ! Thank you so much

  • David Ross Washington Jr 4 years, 10 months ago

    This is such a beautiful poem. I love how powerful it is in its imagery. So epically powerful.

    • Jennifer 4 years, 10 months ago

      Your words are going to make me cry...im so thankful for your kindness david

  • Ceara 4 years, 10 months ago

    Lovely use of descriptive words. I'm curious about how you break up the lines because it doesn't feel like there was much reasoning behind the spacing. Perhaps think about how the structure of the poem will alter the way it is read. I also love the title and think it is a perfect fit :)

    • Jennifer 4 years, 10 months ago

      I will consider your criticism and i am thankful for it and you for reading it !!

  • Miranda Fotia 4 years, 10 months ago

    Lovely!

  • No name 4 years, 10 months ago

    I love the fractured flow of this.