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POND SONG
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Pond song
Dripping
Dripping
Dripping down
Green caresses the clear surface
Splash
Wings of hope
Springs anew, in collective voices
Immortalized in crumbling stone
Rising
Rising
Rising higher
Heaven holds you
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I love this, for whatever reason. I read this part like a Dr. Seuss poem. -
This is such a beautiful poem. I love how powerful it is in its imagery. So epically powerful.
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Your words are going to make me cry...im so thankful for your kindness david
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Lovely use of descriptive words. I'm curious about how you break up the lines because it doesn't feel like there was much reasoning behind the spacing. Perhaps think about how the structure of the poem will alter the way it is read. I also love the title and think it is a perfect fit :)
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I will consider your criticism and i am thankful for it and you for reading it !!
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Lovely!
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I love the fractured flow of this.
Lol..im happy you just read it david ! Thank you so much