PUT TO REST

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Submitted Date 06/20/2019
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The caress of your spawn
Has left me to drown
And now I am withdrawn
As they close my sound

The light from me you took
Withered in my skin
And with a single look
I am gone within

Waterfalls in these eyes
Shards thrown at my heart
Filling me with your lies
Tearing me apart

Frozen, your favored thought
Your gifts are given
Or perhaps they are bought
As you have written

The skin caught on my bones
Cries out to be free
Being caught in the unknown
Stuck full of debris

Throw me down from on high
Fallen to the depths
Calling into the sky
At last put to rest

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  • Ceara 2 months, 4 weeks ago

    This poem reminds me of some of your other pieces that deal with being hurt. It sounds like the narrator is talking about a toxic relationship to me.

    • Ellen Gibson 2 months, 4 weeks ago

      Yes, it does seem that way doesn't it. Thank you for your input.

  • David Ross Washington Jr 2 months, 4 weeks ago

    The light from me you took Withered in my skin And with a single look I am gone within
    This is so cleverly brilliant. I guess it's like double entendre, the literal and figurative nature of the play on words. The light you take could be literal and figurative because they say a person glows, but they don't literally glow, but it still is taken as a literal glow nonetheless. But the reality of it is their aura of how they carry and express themselves. It withers away in the skin because the glow is from the inside, you glow on the outside when you're feeling great inside, so it just withers away back in so you will no longer shine, but the skin is both outer and inner (as the point of the "single look" further verifies the visibility of the glow), as there are both outer and inner layers. Which then further makes the point that the essence, vibrance, and very soul of you is gone ("I am gone within").

  • David Ross Washington Jr 2 months, 4 weeks ago

    Waterfalls in these eyes Shards thrown at my heart Filling me with your lies Tearing me apart
    I love this line too. The beautiful imagery. It makes me think how there is such beauty in our eyes and how they could be filled with water that can just drown someone in the essence of our beautiful soul, but at the same time our tears are like waterfalls are we continue to cry ("tear(ing)" me apart). I also think of the tears as raindrops (ala sharps) as they are tears of pain, pain of our soul, materializing sharply as it's like we are being stabbed in the heart, and this is the blood pouring out from that pain. This poem is so lovely. Amazing world. Sadly we go through these horrible situations, but they make us stronger and we can create beautiful things like this that can touch many people in such a great way.

    • Ellen Gibson 2 months, 4 weeks ago

      And again, this insight is...wow.. It's amazing how others can see something so intense in just a few words. Love this.

  • Rick Doble 2 months, 4 weeks ago

    Waterfalls in these eyes Shards thrown at my heart
    Good turn of phrase -- you are developing a strong personal imagery.

  • Kiersten Felch 2 months, 3 weeks ago

    "the caress of your spawn" just makes me think she hates his kids haha.