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LITTLE SPARROW LOVE

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Submitted Date 05/06/2019
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He walks in wonder

At my smallness

At my sparrow feet

 

And I love to feel his arms

Roll me into the crook of his bend like a sheet of butcher paper

Or a map, snapped back to the ceiling

By an excited professor

 

If I tilt my head just right

Like a dog asking for scraps

Forehead will brush his stubble

 

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  • David Ross Washington Jr 4 years, 11 months ago

    This is beautiful. The vulnerability of love.

    • Zoe Dabbs 4 years, 11 months ago

      The vulnerability of love indeed! Thank you!

  • No name 4 years, 11 months ago

    I love how the title adds another layer to this poem.

    • Zoe Dabbs 4 years, 11 months ago

      Thank you Kiersten!

  • Tomas Chough 4 years, 11 months ago

    Great way of describing the feeling. I like the comparison. Nice work Zoe!

  • Miranda Fotia 4 years, 11 months ago

    I love the way it starts and the part about a dog begging for scraps. Great piece!

    • Zoe Dabbs 4 years, 11 months ago

      Thank you, glad that line spoke to you!

  • Ceara 4 years, 11 months ago

    He walks in wonderAt my smallnessAt my sparrow feet
    Beautiful way to start! Really engages the reader immediately. Thanks for sharing!

    • Zoe Dabbs 4 years, 11 months ago

      Thank you so much!