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SWINGING OUT WIDE

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Submitted Date 04/25/2019
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You may never go to sleep

Without a bottle or a rope

Your blanket will be damp

And the stone will change to dope.

 

It takes much more

Than simpering dreams

To take you from this world

You cannot hide beneath your bed

There is no space beneath your board.

 

Bite your nails down to the quick

Til they bleed without a sound

You cannot be too meek

Or you'll let the rope fall down.

 

You may never go to sleep

Without turning out the light

You cannot break your nose and bleed

Without putting up a fight.

 

So pour the whiskey in your cuts

And let the wounds stay fresh

You must be brave, and feel the burn

Until your light is snuffed

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  • Tomas Chough 4 years, 11 months ago

    Great poem based on a great song. Awesome work Zoe!

  • David Ross Washington Jr 4 years, 11 months ago

    You may never go to sleepWithout a bottle or a ropeYour blanket will be dampAnd the stone will change to dope.It takes much moreThan simpering dreamsTo take you from this worldYou cannot hide beneath your bedThere is no space beneath your board.
    This is so powerful. It makes me think of someone struggling with personal life issues, turning to alcohol (Alcoholism), and trying to take themselves out (suicide) rope, to get away from their life issues, as their way to cope, and that even though they're using these methods as recreational, it's just making them turn to harder more extreme drugs to cope. They then try to use their dreams to hide from their issues, but they can't leave it to fantasy, they have to deal with it in reality.

    • Zoe Dabbs 4 years, 11 months ago

      Hi David, thank you for your reaction. I wrote this about someone who is suicidal. In order to complete the final act, you can't close your eyes and let it happen, you need to make the leap yourself. You need to feel it so to speak. I wrote it about that kind of feeling.

  • David Ross Washington Jr 4 years, 11 months ago

    This is beauty trying to fight your deems by suppressing them, but not realizing that you have to deal with them in reality. The more the person trying to hide them in mask/facade, the more apparent they become, and the heavier the burden gets, as it is suffocating them.

  • No name 4 years, 11 months ago

    Love the imagery here!

  • Miranda Fotia 4 years, 11 months ago

    Very intriguing. What is this about? I'm not familiar with the song.

    • Zoe Dabbs 4 years, 11 months ago

      I wrote this about someone feeling the need to leave this world, but who is questioning their gumption in an attempt to end it all.